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Chronic Diarrhea · 04-15-2003, 10:40 PM

Decent, although I will give you some constructive criticism. If you are wanting to make this a "novel", then you had better give some great character depth.

[quote:6adc9]Martin Gay, a news reporter, was out with his friend, Ryan W. Clark, an Air Force Lieutenant.[/quote:6adc9]

Now if this is going to be a short story, then that is fine. However if you want it to be a little longer, then you're going to have to make your writing more sophisticated.

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Chronic Diarrhea is Offline 1st Lieutenant Posts: 4,318 Join Date: Jun 2002	04-15-2003, 10:40 PM Decent, although I will give you some constructive criticism. If you are wanting to make this a "novel", then you had better give some great character depth. [quote:6adc9]Martin Gay, a news reporter, was out with his friend, Ryan W. Clark, an Air Force Lieutenant.[/quote:6adc9] Now if this is going to be a short story, then that is fine. However if you want it to be a little longer, then you're going to have to make your writing more sophisticated.