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Decent, although I will give you some constructive criticism. If you are wanting to make this a "novel", then you had better give some great character depth.

[quote:6adc9]Martin Gay, a news reporter, was out with his friend, Ryan W. Clark, an Air Force Lieutenant.[/quote:6adc9]

Now if this is going to be a short story, then that is fine. However if you want it to be a little longer, then you're going to have to make your writing more sophisticated.