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Eight Ace · 04-04-2007, 03:15 PM

heres an excerpt from a movie script I'm currently working on:

Sweet J: C'mon Nyck, time to start our new lives in our new house.
Nyck: You start the car honey, I just want to say goodbye to the old place.
Sweet J: Well hurry up, this storm is gonna break any minute.

Nyck walks into backyard, stands looking down at a slight mound six foot long in the corner of yard, lightning illuminating his grin as thunder roars overhead, heavy rain starts to fall

Nyck: Sleep tight motherfucker.
Sweet J:(startling Nyck) Who are you talking to?
Nyck: Wha!..didn't I tell u to get in the fucking car?
Sweet J: Hey babycakes, whats wrong?
Nyck: Nuthin hon, just makin sure the trash was taken care of, c'mon, lets go.

Later that night, Nycks old yard, the torrential downpour reveals a partially rotting hand clutching an optical wheel-mouse.

thoughts?

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Eight Ace is Offline Major Posts: 6,139 Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Sydney	04-04-2007, 03:15 PM heres an excerpt from a movie script I'm currently working on: Sweet J: C'mon Nyck, time to start our new lives in our new house. Nyck: You start the car honey, I just want to say goodbye to the old place. Sweet J: Well hurry up, this storm is gonna break any minute. Nyck walks into backyard, stands looking down at a slight mound six foot long in the corner of yard, lightning illuminating his grin as thunder roars overhead, heavy rain starts to fall Nyck: Sleep tight motherfucker. Sweet J:(startling Nyck) Who are you talking to? Nyck: Wha!..didn't I tell u to get in the fucking car? Sweet J: Hey babycakes, whats wrong? Nyck: Nuthin hon, just makin sure the trash was taken care of, c'mon, lets go. Later that night, Nycks old yard, the torrential downpour reveals a partially rotting hand clutching an optical wheel-mouse. thoughts?